My Bad Experiences about Uttaran
I think Uttaran
serial is quite good but I had a bad experiences about it. so, I am used to
watch a football match in the evening but after Uttaran is being broadcasted on
ANTV I don't have chance to watch a football match anymore because my mom is
always stay tuned on TV and she doesn't let me to change the channel.
one day, I was
tired waiting for my mom wishing she will let me watch my favorite channel but
she didn't. So, I decided to went out and keep my self busy, hoping after came
home I can take a relax and enjoy my time to watch. unfortunately, my mom
already sit there with a remote control on her hand and once again she was
watching Uttaran. Then, I sat beside her, I thought she will stop watching
because it was 5:30 p.m and time for her to cook. A few minutes later she is
going and tell my little brother to record a video of Uttaran because she
doesn't want to miss any episodes. It means I still have not a change to watch.
The next day at 8 pm it was the
day when my favorite channel is being broadcasted. unfortunately, ANTV also
presented "1001 Malam" and all the main characters of Uttaran was
there! obviously my mom didn't want to miss it. I was angry and I greatly
amazed why did my mom love Uttaran so much.
I think Uttaran
is like a magic that made house-wife aslike my mom loves Uttaran so much and I
am sure most of the reasons that caused them like Uttaran is Veer. He is one of
the main characters there. They said he is a cool man.
It's a good draft, the grammatical, word order, collocation are Good
BalasHapusI think it's better if you add "that" in this sentence -> but after "that" Uttaran is being broadcasted.
BalasHapusFor all, I think your story is amazing. The grammatical is good too. Keep writing!
AIDUL / N1A514149
BalasHapusDear afrizal, I hope you don’t mind if I corrected your mistakes :
1. Your writing is very nice but you are a beginner you should practice writing and must look carefully your writing.
2. Supposedly the beginning of each paragraph should be written with a capital letter example"one day”, I was tired of waiting for my mom wishing she will let me watch my favorite channel but she did not . it should be " One day, I was tired of waiting for my mom wishing she will let me watch my favorite channel but she did not” .